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Cold Love\'s Snow Dance
The cold quieted the night,
sharpening the moment
as thick snow flakes fell.
Holding you close to me
our slow dance began,
as in the dimly lit lot
we traced a lover\'s pattern
into the blanket at our feet.
Snow covered our bodies,
nearly making us one
with the backdrop of white
that was cold as the wind,
heated only by our passion.
The dance we began
soon found its way inside.
The kisses of snow to flesh
were replaced by warm lips,
and our numbed fingers
were delved deeply into heat
as our passion gave way
to feverish love making
and we returned ourselves
to a warmer state.
Bodies intertwined, the cold
was quickly forgotten.
But not the dance.
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was quickly forgotten."
Like hell it was. Cold is cold. Which means it's cold. Two people in cold still equals cold. Thats why I'm enjoying my nice beach weather here in Florida. Heck if anything it's too hot down here.
stupid cold, only crazy people live up there where the water is solid but still gets you wet. I want ice to come from my freezer not the sky.
this is beatutiful, i really love all the images you used - GREAT job - this is somewhat like mine, although i think yours is more descriptive of the moment. niiiiiiice stuff!!
as for some "personal" comments...
as thick snow flakes fell - "thick" might want to be changed - takes away from the beauty
heated only by our passion. - i dont know if this is the image you wanted to create - maybe... something like "warmed only by our (something along the lines of "love" here)
were delved deeply into heat...to feverish love making - a little bit different than what i was expecting heh
nevertheless, i really like this, keep it up!!!
Awesome job